Discussion of how you would work more on Long Essay 2 + discussion of which essay you are going to revise.
For Long Essay #2 I would like to add more details and vivid descriptors of how the pain felt but I'm not that skilled in describing pain. Apart from that I am not really sure what else should be added to it and how I would expand it.There is not much dialogue because I don't remember much talking. What is clear to me is the feelings associated with tennis but I don't know if they are coming across and I definitely think that I could add more describing the feeling or (i would prefer) trying to get the reader to connect to it and understand what kind of feelings I'm trying to describe.
At this point I'm not totally sure which essay I will revise. As much as I love this one I don't think I will be able to continue discussing it because it still makes me sad and I still have the aches and pain to remind me of all my old injuries. I'll probably end up revising my first long essay and include stories about control because after my conference I realized that fear and control are connected. That gives me a lot of material to work with and I feel more comfortable expanding on that one.
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